修改前的

So happy to see you again in our English Corner.
Today, we have our old friend Fannie come with us and Ms. Liang is also here.
Because today we use this new meeting material at first time, I arbitrarily assgin the roles according to everyone’s real role at work.
Now. I’ll give you some background of this meeting. We get an urgent task from our client and we have this meeting to discuss how to deal with it. The core purpose is to make our client satisfied and try our best to lower the impacts to our work schedule.
I think everyone is here, so let’s get started. Mr. Yao, please!

Very well! I think we have maken a huge progress, all of us!
Do you have any suggestions or comments about our first part?

Now, i’ll share a very interesting store. At last weekend, I went to the hospital. When i met the doctor who seems to be as old as myself, the doctor said, what;s trouble with you?

I told him that i feel bad, actually i feel almost dead. and then i described how i feel with 胸口疼

after I finish my description, the doctor said, don’t worry young man, it’s very common that somethings you’ll feel uncomfortable and you just go back home and have a good rest.

but it’s really hurts, i said to him. The doctor looked at me and then smiled and said: i also feel 胸口疼.

i hope you like this little story, and do you have any questions or comments about my sharing?

I think it’s a good place to stop, thank you everybody, have a nice evening and see you tommorow

修改后的

1. It’s great to see you all back at our English Corner. Welcome!

2. Today, we’re joined by our old friend Fannie, and we’re also honored to have Ms. Liang with us.

3. Since this is our first time using this new set of discussion materials, I’ve assigned roles based on your actual job positions.

4. Let’s dive right in.

5. I’ll give you a quick rundown of our meeting’s background: We’ve received an urgent task from a client, and we’re here to brainstorm how to deal with it.

6. Our main goal is to keep our client happy while minimizing any disruptions to our regular work schedule.

7. I believe everyone’s here now, so let’s kick things off. Mr. Yao, the floor is yours.

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1. Excellent work, team! I think we’ve finished the first part perfectly. Does anyone have any suggestions or feedback they’d like to share?

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1. Now, let me tell you a funny story from my weekend.

2. I visited the hospital and met a doctor who looked to be around my age.

3. He asked me, “What seems to be the problem?”

4. I told him I was feeling terrible, as if I was on death’s door, and then I described my symptoms, including the pain in my chest.

5. After hearing me out, the doctor reassured me, saying, “Don’t worry, young man. It’s quite common to feel a bit uncomfortable sometimes. Just go home and get some rest.”

6. But I insisted that the pain was real. The doctor looked at me, smiled, and said, “I feel the same chest pain.”

7. I hope you like this little story. Are there any questions or thoughts you’d like to share about my story?

8. It seems here is a good place to stop. Thank you, everyone, for your participation. Have a good evening, and I’ll see you all tomorrow.

对照

1. It’s great to see you all back at our English Corner. Welcome!

   • 修改后的句子更加热情友好，用“It’s great to see you all back”替换了“So happy to see you again”，使语气更加正式和亲切。同时，增加了“Welcome!”来表示对参与者的热烈欢迎。

2. Today, we’re joined by our returning friend Fannie, and we’re also honored to have Ms. Liang with us.

   • 这里用“returning friend Fannie”替换了“old friend Fannie”，使表达更加准确和温馨。同时，增加了对梁女士到来的荣幸之感，显得更为礼貌和尊重。

3. Since this is our first time using this new set of discussion materials, I’ve assigned roles based on your actual job positions.

   • 修改后的句子更加清晰明了，用“new set of discussion materials”替换了“new meeting material”，使表达更加准确。同时，明确了角色分配的依据是“your actual job positions”，使信息更加具体和明确。

4. Let’s dive right in. I’ll give you a quick rundown of our meeting’s background…

   • 这里增加了“Let’s dive right in.”来引导话题，使过渡更加自然流畅。同时，用“quick rundown”替换了“some background”，使表达更加生动和具体。

5. Our main goal is to keep our client happy while minimizing any disruptions to our regular work schedule.

   • 修改后的句子更加具体和明确，用“keep our client happy”和“minimizing any disruptions to our regular work schedule”替换了原句中的表述，使目标更加清晰和可衡量。

6. I believe everyone’s here now, so let’s kick things off. Mr. Yao, the floor is yours.

   • 这里用“kick things off”替换了“get started”，使表达更加地道和生动。同时，用“the floor is yours”来表示让姚先生发言，显得更为正式和礼貌。

7. Excellent work, team! I think we’ve made significant strides in this first part of our discussion.

   • 修改后的句子更加鼓励和肯定团队的成果，用“Excellent work, team!”和“significant strides”替换了原句中的表述，使语气更加积极和正面。

8. Does anyone have any suggestions or feedback they’d like to share?

   • 这里用“suggestions or feedback”替换了“suggestions or comments”，因为“feedback”更侧重于对之前讨论的反馈，而“comments”可能更偏向于一般性的评论。

9. Now, let me tell you a funny story from my weekend…

   • 修改后的句子更加自然流畅，用“let me tell you a funny story”来引入故事，使话题转换更加自然和顺畅。

10. Are there any questions or thoughts you’d like to share about my story?

    • 这里用“questions or thoughts”替换了“questions or comments”，因为“thoughts”更侧重于对故事的思考和感想，而“comments”可能更偏向于对故事的评论或评价。

11. It seems like a fitting moment to wrap up. Thank you, everyone, for your participation.

    • 修改后的句子更加礼貌和感激，用“fitting moment to wrap up”替换了“good place to stop”，使表达更加地道和自然。同时，增加了对大家参与的感谢之情。

12. Have a pleasant evening, and I’ll see you all tomorrow.

    • 这里用“Have a pleasant evening”替换了“have a nice evening”，因为“pleasant”更侧重于愉快和舒适的感受，而“nice”可能更偏向于一般性的好或不错。同时，增加了“I’ll see you all tomorrow.”来表示期待明天的再次相聚。